Fiction Workshop 5 Critiquing a short story

Read your writing buddy’s short story.

What do you understand?

(Remember: the best feedback you can give is simply to tell your buddy what you think the story is about and what is happening in it.)     

Are all of the components of the story there?

·         Inciting incident

·         Growing complexities  

·         Crisis

·         Climax

·         Resolution

Is the resolution satisfying?

Look particularly carefully at the opening scene.

·         How “immediate” is it?

·         What could your partner do to make it more immediate?  

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Fiction Workshop 4 Point of View

These are the narrative points of view you may choose:

First person

Very intimate relationship between reader and character or reader and author.

Only tells one story at a time.

May be main character, author or fictionalised author 

Allows some discussion of the story.

Character has had the growth and reader cannot have growth with the character.

Third person

Close third person

• More intimate even than first
• Reader can experience growth with protagonist

Removed third person.

• Gives author a stronger voice.

·         Allows points of view to shift.

Second person

This can feel very intrusive to the reader but can also be very strong. .   

Omniscient author

• Allows a commentary from the author
• Allows changes of point of view
• Allows different scenes with different people, a little like in a play.

Story teller

• Tells more than shows.  
• Tends not to moralise.
• Is more engaging as a performance.

Writing Exercise

1. Rewrite the opening lines of a story you like in a different person e.g. if it is written in first person, change it to third or even second.
2. Now write another part of the story from another character’s point of view. Perhaps take a minor character or even the “enemy”.
3. Write a personal first person narrative; it is really you telling this story.
4. Now write the same narrative, still first person, as if you were a different person.
5. Take one paragraph form a story you are writing and do a “patch test”.  Try it out with different persons and different tenses (past, present, future). Use at least three different combinations. Which works best? Try to get into the habit of using this “patch test” in all of your writing. Ask a writing buddy for their opinion.